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NoobStory

Post by skygar9 » Thu Mar 12, 2009 2:44 am

its my first fan fiction about a noob >.< I don't think it's good for a first start


NoobStory
"I'm here! On Maple Island!" The noob had said.

The noob slowly walked up to a snail.

"Why hello there, Mr.Snail. How are you today?" There was no reply.

"OMG DIE SNAIL!!!" The noob used his sword and quickly hit the snail multiple times.

"Yay! I defeated Mr.Snail!"

Then, as the noob peered down at his feet, he noticed a small bronze coin.

"What is that?" He got a closer look. On the side of the coin, it had the number 15 printed on it.

"omg ty snail! IM RICH!"

Then, as the noob went from portal to portal, he climbed up a ladder and saw a Blue Snail.

"OMG A BLUE SNAIL!!!" Like the first snail he killed, he quickly hit it several times.

Level up. "Omg I LEVEL UP!!" He put his AP into Str.

"I'm gonna be a warrior who kills snai--!!!" Just then, he had turned around to a rumbling noise.

"What in the world?" He saw a blob with two sparkling eyes, with a string on top of it connecting to a smaller blob. He saw a slime. For a level 2, it'd be hard to kill a large blob!

"Die!! DIEEEE " It took him a while to kill the slime. He had been doing a range of 1-7 damage. After killing the slime, he stared at his EXP bar. "Not fair. I only have 50% after killing the snot blob!! "

After walking a long time, he safley arrived at Amherst.

"Hello... Random guy... " A teen-age looking girl stared at the noob. "Hey, are you used to this world? Maybe you could take Rain's Maple Quiz at some time? C'mon. It won't be hard!"

"K, fine"

She had seven questions. It took the noob half an hour to get ALL of the questions right! During the quiz, the noob levled up.

"woot. ty for the quiz ." The noob had 24 Str by that time. He went east of Amherst to find a field of Red Snails, Slimes, Pigs and even Mushrooms.

"lol this is gonna be easy!!" Though it was not. He even died while trying to kill a mushroom. Though, he still leveled up, not losing EXP from death.

After doing loads of training, and along with quests, the noob leveled to level 7. He had 30 Str.

"Time to leave! I'm going to see Victoria Island!"

At South Perry, he talked to Shanks, the captain of the ship. The noob has Lucas's recomend letter, so he did not have to pay 150 mesos.

"I'm off!" The ship set off into the sky. The noob sat in the front of the ship, sitting in The Relaxer, a chair made from Pio.

It had taken almost all day to get to Victoria island. At sunset, the ship began to stop at a town called Lith Harbor.


Part 2 coming soon =o I don't think this was a very good fan fiction ._.

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Re: NoobStory

Post by Zaylo » Thu Mar 12, 2009 4:34 pm

it was ok with no grammar errors good job

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Re: NoobStory

Post by Coolboy994 » Thu Mar 12, 2009 7:25 pm

I think there was one grammer problem, and the word was "teen-age" instead of teenage. And the story is pretty decent; that's all the stuff I do at Maple Island. :P

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Re: NoobStory

Post by skygar9 » Thu Mar 12, 2009 10:24 pm

Great opinions, guys! I thought it was sorta... Bad. >.<

the "teen-age" part was a mistake >.<

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Re: NoobStory

Post by synn90210 » Fri Mar 13, 2009 2:03 am

wasnt bad. sounds a lot like jonlins fan fic though. One thing though you dont want to abbriveiate when you write a story

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Re: NoobStory

Post by skygar9 » Fri Mar 13, 2009 2:14 am

Huh? O-o That's how a noob talks.

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Post by LeoWu » Fri Mar 13, 2009 4:50 am

Wow no Grammar errors the story Is Ok.

I've noticed that people that write good fan fictions that have good ideas and stuff with interesting Fan fictions have lots of Grammar errors. (not talking about you Zaylo, your Great) and people that have great grammar skills have not so good fan fiction writing. 0.0 strange huh?

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Post by synn90210 » Mon Mar 16, 2009 1:04 am

skygar9 wrote:Huh? O-o That's how a noob talks.


i understand that but if you go read a book, authors dont abbriviate when someone speaks.

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Re: NoobStory

Post by skygar9 » Mon Mar 16, 2009 11:13 pm

synn90210 wrote:
skygar9 wrote:Huh? O-o That's how a noob talks.


i understand that but if you go read a book, authors dont abbriviate when someone speaks.


Well, this isn't a super real official book series, now is it? o-o

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Re: NoobStory

Post by Zaylo » Wed Mar 18, 2009 2:01 am

If you say that, your not a writer. Because you dont care about your work. Writing isnt a game.

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Re: NoobStory

Post by synn90210 » Thu Mar 19, 2009 1:43 am

damn straight zaylo...damn straight

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Re: NoobStory

Post by skygar9 » Thu Mar 19, 2009 7:09 pm

XD

Im a carless writer o-o

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Re: NoobStory

Post by synn90210 » Sat Mar 21, 2009 7:04 am

i can tell (F3)

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Re: NoobStory

Post by jonlin » Thu Mar 26, 2009 8:32 pm

LOL @ title
LOL @ comments
LOL @ story (random but somehow funny)
good grammar and spelling

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Re: NoobStory

Post by chobbilight » Sat May 30, 2009 10:04 am

lolz hello mr.snail
no response
die!!! mr snail
lmao

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