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A small story

Posted: Wed Jun 08, 2011 2:30 am
by MsMeowzers
Here is a really small story I worked on in school.
The Only Nightmare in the World
Night 1
A small light illuminated the small space.It was all red,and gave off a feel
of elegance.

"She isn't here!" said a voice. The voice shot through the darkness.

"Forget it. We'll get her in the day," said another voice. Both were men's voices.
They turned off the small light and lightly stepped downstairs. Suddenly, red and blue
lights started flashing.

"Step out of the house. We know you are in there," boomed a megaphone.
The men darted out of the back door instead of going out the front door. They ran
into the country,then went towards a river.For the rest of the night,they stayed there,
using only survival instincts to make a small lean-to.
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A small girl, about 10, walked around the darkened city with a boy. The
girl had light brown hair and wood-brown eyes.Her black glasses were spiderwebbed
a little. Her night-blue dress fluttered in the wind. The boy had black, short hair and
had glasses too. His green eyes looked like pieces of jade. He was wearing a royal-blue
shirt and dark jeans.

"Scarlett, how did you spiderweb your glasses?" asked the boy.

"Why do you want to know Josiah?" Scarlett asked.

"Just wanted to know.You know we're-" Scarlett suddenly stopped,looking around
slowly. She quickly ran into an alley,pulling and pushing Josiah into a pile of garbage bags.

"Ssshh!" Scarlett hissed,quickly ripping her dress off to reveal a black jumpsuit. She stuffed her torn dress into a garbage bag. Then she pulled up Josiah from the pile of bags and
ran into the darkness of the looming city.
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Night 2
"I found food! We can eat now!" Josiah yelled to Scarlett.

Scarlett ran over to him. "Guess what! I found more kids like us!" she said happily, bouncing around.

"How can we trust them? When you're on the run, you can barely trust anyone," said Josiah. "They could be cannibals for all I know. People who want to kill us for freaky rituals."

"Rosalyn, Chase, come over here!" Scarlett yelled. Two kids ran over to her. They looked like siblings. The boy, who looked about 14, had sea blue eyes, and beige hair. He was wearing a red striped shirt and dark red pants. He wore hand-me-down sandals. The girl, who looked about 12, had dark blue eyes and beige hair too. She had her hair in a ponytail. She carred a large backpack. She wore a dress, which was torn a little bit, and boots.

Please tell me how I did. I am pretty rusty.

Re: A small story

Posted: Wed Jun 08, 2011 7:38 pm
by stng75
shouldnt this be in the fan fic section?
anyway it kinda looks like you cut it off at the end and it skipped from the first to the second night
and im not so sure whats up with that jumpsuit and tearing off her dress, i mean shes 10 right?

Re: A small story

Posted: Wed Jun 08, 2011 10:35 pm
by 1LastBreath
LOLOLOLOL RAPEEE
AHAHAHAHAHHAHAA¸<<btw your vry rusty

Re: A small story

Posted: Wed Jun 08, 2011 10:45 pm
by Mechy
All i read is a 10 year old girl walking with a boy
now im thinking the girl is gonna get raped

Re: A small story

Posted: Wed Jun 08, 2011 11:15 pm
by MsMeowzers
Its a crossover with a series called Conspiracy 365. Its about a wanted boy running everywhere trying to figure out a important riddle.
The kids are all wanted too.
Profiles will be out soon.
Im also rusty because I have to write cheesy essays,which I make SUPER short.

*Edit*
Scarlett's profile is ready.

Scarlett Burton
Age:10
Hair color:Light Brown
Eye color: Dark Brown
Accessory(Will come to play later): Spider-webbed glasses
Bio: Accused for a berserk rampage,because she was found to have genes for a type of insanity, she has been on the run since she was 9. She met Josiah 4 months after she was wanted.
Relationships:
Cal Ormond: Distantly related, *** ***** ** ****** ** ** ****** ** ***** (Censored for spoilers)
Josiah Stafford: Fellow runner, friend
Chase Burris: ???
Rosalyn Burris: ???

Re: A small story

Posted: Fri Jun 10, 2011 4:33 am
by stng75
shouldnt you have told us it was a crossover before you told us the story?