Maplestory

I was confused really badly. I said"how could you possibly know that"! He said" I was monitoring you the whole time". Marissa said"well,now that he knows where Mang is let's go find him". Grendel handed Alexis the map and we left for the destination. It was Ludibrium and I said" wait you know how Mang makes fake bosses". Alexis said" yeah like horntail". I replied" yeah that's where the boss Papulatus is"! She said" we'd better get going". It wasn't long to get to Ludibrium. Once we got there we followed the map to the place marked with an M for Mang. We had to get to the very bottom of the Ludi factory. When we got close a very critical battle was going on. A tall but skinny kid was fighting atleast 100 zombie clock things and a giant one eyed thing. Alexis whispered " that's Thantasos the guardian of Papulatus". We jumped down and helped by killing clocks and severly damaging Thantasos. When they died the kid looked at us fiercely and it looked like someone cut him on the cheek. He said with an almost deathly voice"thanks for helping me kill Thantasos I'm Leo a night lord". We told him our names and why we were down here. He said" I'm here for the same
thing".

I asked him if he wanted to help us catch him once and for all. He decided he could use help after all. We kept walking and I looked around at what once was and what never will be. When we came opon a humongous door we opened it and saw Mang he said" once again nice to see you losers hahahahah"! We said bravely" you're
going down this time Mang". He said" I've got a friend for you meet your doom PAPULATUS!!!!!! take them down". We felt afraid I've never been up against Papulautus. We weakened him but he gained the upper hand he hit us
and threw us back against the wall. Leo said" we need more help". Just then a guy walked in his name was Benra an axe fighter by the looks of him. He smashed Papulatus's clock and Papulatus blew up into pieces. He ran when we got up to thank him. Marissa said" that was weird he just ran away". Leo said" Mang got away again". Then Grendel called and said" Mang is in Mu Lung go there and stop him once and for all". I left the room and teleported to the top with everyone. We ran to the boat and we were on
our way to Mu Lung.

I noticed we were flying in stork things but I just went with it and when I got there and met
up with everyone we left to find Mang. We searched high and low for Mang. He was no where at all to be
seen. I said depressingly" where is he". Leo said " he might be in the volcano building more fake bosses". We ran to the volcano cave and walked in. We were walking for hours trying to find
him. Alexis said tiredly" whe-where is he"? I wondered if he was in the top of the molten firery and dangerous
volcano. Then a blood curdling scream that came from the top. It sounded like he was killing someone but Leo said he's probably making coolies. I thought "crap, I hate coolies". We ran to the top and found 5000 coolies creeping around and Mang yelled"welcome to my house of coolies". Leo figured out that the coolies die after getting their heads cut off. He used shadow partner and avenger to kill all the coolies and turned to go to Mang. Leo attacked Mang first and Mang stabbed him in the eye. We gasped as Leo fell to the ground. He wasn't dead but his one eye was blind. We killed Mang and Benra came and snuck up on us and swiped Alexis and ran. She screamed and Benra was gone with Alexis and we went to tend to Leo. He said" my eye is okay but we need to save her". I called Grendel and told him were going after this Benra to kill him and get Alexis back.

this one isnt bad but please please please have a new paragraph when a new person speaks.

Kthxbai I'll use it
in chapter 3

mmkay thankies. ik my fan fic isnt good but if u want an example about spacing and stuffs look at it.

I'll check it out kthxbai

mmkay! sorry bout the random flame on the first one. that was a friend on my acc >.<

Orlly well anyway what did you think of the first one??

it was good but again with the whole spacing thing

U mEan every time I talk make a new
paragraph

i mean everytime a new person speaks. like if one person is talking then something happens then the same person talks again you dont have to space but if one person is talking and then another starts speaking then you have to make a space when the new person speaks

i get it nao ps i passed ember nao im on first ranking page yea mehwoooo

This is waht synn means
Example:
He glared in anger.

"Hi" Synn said
"Hi" 1Last breath said back with urine in his mouth.

Their eyes locked.

Thats what he means

LeoWu wrote:This is waht synn means
Example:
He glared in anger.

"Hi!",Synn said."Hi!",1Last breath said back with urine in his mouth.

Their eyes locked.

Thats what he means

Lets rephrase that.

The truth is ugly

xD leo is right.....truth hurts kids :p

Off topic: Nooooo you passed me!!!! (cause: parents barred me from my computer)

On topic: Please, no more blobs of text! (points at what synn said)