Maplestory

Sammy was so shocked that he stopped breathing for a couple of seconds
he hesitantly moved around the orange mushroom
eying it with anger curiosity and fear
Then suddenly everything went blank
the last thing that Sammy saw was the mushroom running towards him
He got up and equipped his trusty razor
And with his most fierce F5 he had done in his life he charged at the mushroom
thinking of Jackie all the way
running into death
He stab into the mushroom and it only winced
He was thrown violently across the map into a maple tree
He knew wen he tried to get up that he had broken his back
the pain didnt come to him at first
but was killing him in seconds
He just wanted to kill himself and reached for his razor
Then suddenly
Shing!
the sound of blades slashing into the thick gooey skin of the mushroom.
Bonk
The sound of a strong traveler with 25 strength smacking the mushroom.
It was all over. They gently skinned the mushroom and took its cap and the mesos that it had stolen from travelers
Then all the attention was on him.
Everyone was in shock and the travelers did not do wat to do
they carried him to the nearest potion shop
and he was healed
after the surgery he heard the head healer saying
Im sorry Mrs,Mia
he is not going to make it
and the only thought that came to sammy was Jackie
He told the healer
take me to Jackie
let my last minutes be with her

TBC

The original story line was wierd.
1/10
Much better than the other one.
but as i read through the story,
i didnt quite under stand much.
You killed the mushie and
the jackie guy wasnt going to make
it or something.
I dont even know how you
look,
Your back ground.
Like come on.
Seriously?

This is a 1.2/10
I would say better than
the other one though.

sorry i wil stop'

why would you place f5 in your story
cant you place something like

iSerenity3 wrote:And with his most fierce scream and angry face he had done in his life he charged at the mushroom
whit the thought of protecting jackie

BTW i'm not rlly a good writer

because sammy is a character
and he used the button F5 to make angry face
:DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDd

i suck at writing but i am only 11 >.>

bboyz4 wrote:i suck at writing but i am only 11 >.>

well its ok, maybe spend more time on it
read my questers from the beginning and see how its done

and trust me, it isnt often when leowu says positive things

poke1024 wrote:and trust me, it isnt often when leowu says positive things

once a month

thats because i write my stories once a month

poke1024 wrote:thats because i write my stories once a month

Win comeback

poke1024 wrote:thats because i write my stories once a month

i hate zaylo for his previous post

LeoWu wrote:The original story line was wierd.
1/10
Much better than the other one.
but as i read through the story,
i didnt quite under stand much.
You killed the mushie and
the jackie guy wasnt going to make
it or something.
I dont even know how you
look,
Your back ground.
Like come on.
Seriously?

This is a 1.2/10
I would say better than
the other one though.

Whatever you do, don't listen to Leo Wu. HE ONLY JOINED MAPLEANIME TO READ FANFICS.

He has never posted anywhere but fanfictions. He rates everything 1/10 stars because he knows he can't make decent fanfics

lolz leowu.....gonna comeback and reply on that post

chobbilight wrote:

poke1024 wrote:thats because i write my stories once a month

i hate zaylo for his previous post

dont you hate me anyways?

.........i hate you more for that

lolz...HATERS!

skygar9 wrote:

LeoWu wrote:The original story line was wierd.
1/10
Much better than the other one.
but as i read through the story,
i didnt quite under stand much.
You killed the mushie and
the jackie guy wasnt going to make
it or something.
I dont even know how you
look,
Your back ground.
Like come on.
Seriously?

This is a 1.2/10
I would say better than
the other one though.

Whatever you do, don't listen to Leo Wu. HE ONLY JOINED MAPLEANIME TO READ FANFICS.

He has never posted anywhere but fanfictions. He rates everything 1/10 stars because he knows he can't make decent fanfics

I wonder why you use the Word "Decent"

Cause then you just made your self
sound like your FF
Are even worse than 0/10.
No Offence.
Yes I Read FF.

Is that bad?

It seems like your not happy
because i don't give you positive
Criticism?

But come on? Why not listen
to me?
Why?
I came here to read FF
IS NOT
a good reason.
Think before you post.
I cant make a decent
FF?
How about this
Lets make a
Competition.
Me and you.
We both write a
Different Genre of
Fan Fictions. and
let others Vote
witch is better.
If I lose.
I will quit writing
and Quit Mapleanime,
But if you lose.
You do the same thing.

Is that a deal?
Or are you just going to chicken out
cause you cant make a "Decent"
FF.

Basically You gotta accept
after posting that post
you just wrote.
Cause if you say no,
You are going to make
your self sound like
a Really Dum person.
Very idiotic.

So what do you say?
If you accept just
say yes below this post.
If you say no.
You really will be a idoit.
No offence.



P.S I've posted many posts on Chat forums.
So stop saying I haven't.
And I admire all your hard work to
Click on my avatar and check my
page out, but seriously.
You better accept this challenge.
Hope its entertaining.

leowu 2 long i got bored after the firt word

chobbilight wrote:leowu 2 long i got bored after the firt word

Just read it.
My name is Leo.
Not "LeoWu"

its a competition i invited
skyar to compete with me cause he thinks
I cant make a "Decent"
FF.

Just read it dude