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The Slime Jewel

Posted: Sun Jun 07, 2009 2:52 am
by SlimeJay
One Day Jay wanted to explore he figured he buy a sword you know for beginners. He went to Lith Harbour and bought a sword a orange and black t-shirt and a pair of sandblasted jeans he has blue rubber boots. Now he was ready to explore. The first day he had gained 8 levels he was know level 20 he thought he would try a job so he had to pick he thought to himself and said "Pirate,Theif,Warrior,Mage,and Bowman. He picked theif the Dark Lord took him to his school trained him day and night the day he became level 30 he said good-bye to Dark Lord for his 2nd job advancement.

Before he went there he went to his village it was gone. Fire burned within the small village he yelled and a small girl came out and said "bad people came they were from Kerning City known as Slime King's Minions they came in search for the jewel". Jay asked "Uhhh what jewel". The small girl explained that the jewel was stolen from him by a Shadower known as The Dark One. No one knows where he came from he was training with the Dark Lord then dissapeared after he was a full-fleged Shadower. Not even the best Ninjas were able to defeat him. Suddenly the small girl said her name was Brooke. Jay told her his name and when Brooke ran ahead Jay had tripped Brooke was standing there but didn't see him he digged up what he had tripped on and a note attached to it he read it and it said "If you have found this you will be able to become a Shadower this is the jewel I stole from the Slime King,Yes I am The Dark One I have been deceased for quite some time the minions have still been searching for this please take it with you and show it to the Dark Lord show him the note he will grant you the power after you have reached level 120. Jay was surprised he hid it in a little leather bag and put it in he jeans. Brooke had come back to get him and Jay told her that he tripped so they went off to Kerning City for new equipment.

Jay bought a blue pao and blue pao pants. He kept his blue rubber boots from his mother. He had been leveling up he had made it to third job so he bought a Gephart claw.Hermit he picked that job because that was the Dark One's job. Jay said to Brooke that if he could level up by doing quests. Brooke said yes and Jay did the bosses quest he had finaly made it he went to Kerning City Brooke had been away so he didn't wait for her he went to Dark Lord and gave him the leather bag the Lord read the note and said "Jay you have come very far you have found the jewel now he could be the next Dark One". With those words Jay went to avenge his mother's death to kill the Slime King. He walked and walked until he came to the tower of the Slime King he went up the tower and the Slime King said "Puny One have you come to be defeated"? Jay took his gephart and The Slime King was defeated and Jay became the best ninja ever.

The End (redface)

Re: The Slime Jewel

Posted: Sun Jun 07, 2009 2:55 am
by Zaylo
Space your paragraphs I'm not going to even bother reading

Re: The Slime Jewel

Posted: Sun Jun 07, 2009 5:11 am
by LeoWu
Oh a short story. Wow. Looks wierd I just red the last sentence and first sentence.
Didnt bother to read the rest.

Re: The Slime Jewel

Posted: Sun Jun 07, 2009 6:22 am
by synn90210
hmm.....i wasnt at all impressed.....

Re: The Slime Jewel

Posted: Sun Jun 07, 2009 1:41 pm
by SlimeJay
LeoWu wrote:Oh a short story. Wow. Looks wierd I just red the last sentence and first sentence.
Didnt bother to read the rest.

OMG COME ON PEOPLE IS EVERYTHING WRONG WITH ME I JUST WROTE IT TO SHOW YOU GUYS HOW CREATIVE IT WAS AT LEAST YOU COULD SAY SOMETHING NICE IM JUST NEW GOD (hothead) (hothead)

Re: The Slime Jewel

Posted: Sun Jun 07, 2009 8:52 pm
by jonlin
well, it was....nice?

anyways, write it in chapters and with way more detail >.< don't post a summary or w/e here!

Re: The Slime Jewel

Posted: Mon Jun 08, 2009 3:15 pm
by johunnnes
niiiiice......?? (F6)

Re: The Slime Jewel

Posted: Mon Jun 08, 2009 7:33 pm
by poke1024
u dont have commas or spaces (F3)
its a okay beginners story

Re: The Slime Jewel

Posted: Mon Jun 08, 2009 9:25 pm
by chobbilight
i for confused after the 5th sentence then i started again but then i didn't know where i was

Re: The Slime Jewel

Posted: Tue Jun 09, 2009 4:04 am
by LeoWu
Please Dont write anymore.
Try to practice writing and when you think you
have improved alot or enough start posting
agian. And not short hitters please.
We like continuous.