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the maple forbidden power

Posted: Sat May 30, 2009 7:15 pm
by chobbilight
the party!!

brian, chobbi and jay went searching for some people 2 help kill demolition. But then Brian said
"you know before we go we need to go to a spa or something to relax before we break down our bodies"

chobbi said"ugg....is there any spa here then?"

Brain answerred "didn't you heard about the new spa in showa"

Jay got confused and asked " what the hell is showa"

Brian got mad and said "shut the hell up and just follow me"

so they went to korean folk town. they saw a paladin yelling at some people
"what kind of food is this, your food sux, i want cookies!!!"

Chobbi heard that and said "what kind of town doesn't have cookies"

Brian answerred "just ignore the crazy paladin, i found a map, sow just follow me"

Finally they reached showa and went in the spa. The lady said "take of your clothes and get this bathrobe on then you can enter the spa" but then she saw jay as a dragon and said "no pets allowed in the spa please put the pet in this room whit the other pets, this is a spa for pets"

Jay got mad and said "that's racisme, my body got stolen you crazy lady"

Chobbi said "hey shut up, or we will get kicked out"

Jay got in the spa for pets. He saw a television and a xbox 360 and played COD 4 online on it "this isn't this bad"

Chobbi and brian got changed and entered the spa. They saw a weird looking dark knight in the corner and briand asked chobbi "is he emo?"

chobbi said "i dont know lets stay at the away from him"

At that moment the crazy paladin got in and saw the dark knight and said "hi poe, what ya doing?"

poe said "caelin, shut up and come over here"

Caelin went to poe and they were looking at a whole and then they left. Chobbi got curious and went to the whole and looked inside and saw naked girls but then brian asked "whats going on?"

chobbi didn't say anything. Then the door got slammed and ten guys came and yelled "you perv, why are you watching at our ladies, lets go outside" the guy dragged chobbi outside and brian followed them.

when they were outside, jonlin throwed chobbi's clothes at him and in a sec chobbi got dressed. The guys charged at chobbi whit swords and knifes. chobbi used flash jump to get away from them and throwed three crystal ilbis and killed three guys. At that moment brian had his clothes on and swinged whit his spear one time and stabbed two times and killed also three guys. So now there were 4 left but they were haevy armed and didn't dodge any attacks. but then two of the guys got crushed by a hammer and the other two had there head cut of.

Caelin laughed and said "dont tell me you pervs were peekin at the girls"

brian got mad at chobbi and yelled " what the hell, there were girls at the spa, why didn't you tell me?"

chobbi said "cause i know your not a perv and you two were also peeking"

stay tuned for more and i didn't had microsoft word to use my spelling check

Re: the maple forbidden power

Posted: Sat May 30, 2009 9:02 pm
by jonlin
wait, who's jonlin 0.o

Re: the maple forbidden power

Posted: Sat May 30, 2009 9:19 pm
by chobbilight
cealin is jonlin........

Re: the maple forbidden power

Posted: Sat May 30, 2009 10:44 pm
by jonlin
I was pointing out one of the bigger mistakes and it's caelin not cealin

Re: the maple forbidden power

Posted: Sat May 30, 2009 10:56 pm
by chobbilight
ow but be honest was it good?

Re: the maple forbidden power

Posted: Sat May 30, 2009 10:57 pm
by jonlin
yes it was fairly good chobbi, though try to work on your english

Re: the maple forbidden power

Posted: Sat May 30, 2009 11:00 pm
by chobbilight
yeah but it would be better if i had microsoft word cause its anoying searching in a dictionary

Re: the maple forbidden power

Posted: Sat May 30, 2009 11:06 pm
by jonlin
if you can't get microsoft word free use open office, it can also open all word processing program files

Re: the maple forbidden power

Posted: Sat May 30, 2009 11:23 pm
by chobbilight
windows vista wont open it.....dam you windows vista

Re: the maple forbidden power

Posted: Sat May 30, 2009 11:46 pm
by Zaylo
chobbilight wrote:windows vista wont open it.....dam you windows vista

I like answerred people too...

Anyways i dont even get the storyline, if there is one. I suggest finding a way to use spell check, or just dont try making fanfiction.

Re: the maple forbidden power

Posted: Sun May 31, 2009 12:47 am
by chobbilight
Zaylo wrote:
chobbilight wrote:windows vista wont open it.....dam you windows vista

I like answerred people too...

Anyways i dont even get the storyline, if there is one. I suggest finding a way to use spell check, or just dont try making fanfiction.

did you ever notice i never listened 2 you?

Re: the maple forbidden power

Posted: Sun May 31, 2009 1:06 am
by synn90210
uhh all i have to say is lolwut O.o? i srsly dont understand it. also srsly use spellcheck and grammar check

Re: the maple forbidden power

Posted: Sun May 31, 2009 9:25 pm
by jonameepsman546
is this ch.3????????????????????

Re: the maple forbidden power

Posted: Mon Jun 01, 2009 9:38 am
by chobbilight
jonameepsman546 wrote:is this ch.3????????????????????

yeah it is chapter 3 part 1