Knights of Cydonia chapter 2

[nublet]

Knights of Cydonia Chapter 2

I am Celion. An average 14 year old boy searching for the meaning of his life.

Celion! Get back up and try again!
That’s my father Siegfried Faullgorauth the leader of unit 43 of the knights of Cydonia. Right now I’m training sword fighting with my brother Sylian soldier 7 of unit 47 of the knights.
Fight!

My father signals the beginning of the fight with a roar!

As Sylian charge after me raising is wooden sword in the air in a crooked format as if he going to swipe diagonally so I raise my sword with both hand to my left tilting the sword in a horizontal line in order to parry his blow! And just as he swipes I scrape my sword past his and turn behind him leaving his back exposed. I raise my sword with both my hand and bring it down on his back with great speed, but then he kicks my leg and i fall to the ground. He quickly jumps back and his ready to charge again, he raises his sword and charges towards me so i slide across the dirt fill pit and raise my sword in a parry and block his slice. In a daring decision i then swipe kick him leaving him on the ground.

As i steadily come to my feet he does the same and we both stare at each other with gruesome anger filled eyes and we both raise our swords and yell as we charge at each other. Now he is about a foot away i stop, slide and lower my sword to his stomach and pound in to his torso. I let loose one more shriek and the punch his face thus punding him to the dirt.

Great Celion you did great! Now you are almost ready to join the knights.

I walk slowly and quietly and let out my hand to my brother in order to help him up, but he smacks my hand away and wobbles to his feet with anger and hatred filled in his eyes.
As he’s limping away I feel guilty but I also feel...great that I finally beat my brother. I walk to my father and I ask him what’s next

You must learn to have the wisdom of a true knight of Cydonia, follow me

While we are walking I realise a really tall castle leading to the skies. Its surface contains a lot of rocky blocks held together by gravity I realize a top window with a young woman in a blue silver lined dress staring at me with tears running down her face. She looks back very quickly as if she heard a noise.
Slam!
I heard a loud noise coming from the east when I look I see a rack of food collapsed on the ground, when I look back to the window I cannot see the girl anymore all I see is the darkness of the room.

See son look that’s where we are going, there a really nice princess who lives here and she likes boys with bravery and remorse in their souls. She would be perfect for you.

I didn’t respond to what he was saying because I was just amazed by the pure elegance and beauty of this tremendous castle.
As we near the castle we see two tall men in black plated armour laced with silver and gold, they both wield two very long golden spears that look as if they were cracked and scraped with several spike hanging out of each side. After a conversation between my dad and them we finally gain entrance to the castle. It look much, much bigger inside than it does outside of the castle out of the dark hallway comes a little man in a red nobleman outfit and greets us.

Hello! Welcome to the kingdom of Cydonia, I am the castle tour just tell me where you would like to go and I will take you!
Before I even get to speak my father comes in and Sais “to the room of truth”

So be it..... Follow me.

To be continued please rate form 1-10 thank you!

[Zaylo]

Knights of Cydonia Chapter 2

I am Celion. An average 14 year old boy searching for the meaning of his life.

Celion! Get back up and try again!
That’s my father Siegfried Faullgorauth the leader of unit 43 of the knights of Cydonia. Right now I’m training sword fighting with my brother Sylian soldier 7 of unit 47 of the knights.
Fight!

My father signals the beginning of the fight with a roar!

As Sylian charge after me raising is wooden sword in the air in a crooked format as if he going to swipe diagonally so I raise my sword with both hand to my left tilting the sword in a horizontal line in order to parry his blow! And just as he swipes I scrape my sword past his and turn behind him leaving his back exposed. I raise my sword with both my hand and bring it down on his back with great speed, but then he kicks my leg and i fall to the ground. He quickly jumps back and his ready to charge again, he raises his sword and charges towards me so i slide across the dirt fill pit and raise my sword in a parry and block his slice. In a daring decision i then swipe kick him leaving him on the ground.

As i steadily come to my feet he does the same and we both stare at each other with gruesome anger filled eyes and we both raise our swords and yell as we charge at each other. Now he is about a foot away i stop, slide and lower my sword to his stomach and pound in to his torso. I let loose one more shriek and the punch his face thus punding him to the dirt.

Great Celion you did great! Now you are almost ready to join the knights.

I walk slowly and quietly and let out my hand to my brother in order to help him up, but he smacks my hand away and wobbles to his feet with anger and hatred filled in his eyes.
As he’s limping away I feel guilty but I also feel...great that I finally beat my brother. I walk to my father and I ask him what’s next

You must learn to have the wisdom of a true knight of Cydonia, follow me

While we are walking I realise a really tall castle leading to the skies. Its surface contains a lot of rocky blocks held together by gravity I realize a top window with a young woman in a blue silver lined dress staring at me with tears running down her face. She looks back very quickly as if she heard a noise.
Slam!
I heard a loud noise coming from the east when I look I see a rack of food collapsed on the ground, when I look back to the window I cannot see the girl anymore all I see is the darkness of the room.

See son look that’s where we are going, there a really nice princess who lives here and she likes boys with bravery and remorse in their souls. She would be perfect for you.

I didn’t respond to what he was saying because I was just amazed by the pure elegance and beauty of this tremendous castle.
As we near the castle we see two tall men in black plated armour laced with silver and gold, they both wield two very long golden spears that look as if they were cracked and scraped with several spike hanging out of each side. After a conversation between my dad and them we finally gain entrance to the castle. It look much, much bigger inside than it does outside of the castle out of the dark hallway comes a little man in a red nobleman outfit and greets us.

Hello! Welcome to the kingdom of Cydonia, I am the castle tour just tell me where you would like to go and I will take you!
Before I even get to speak my father comes in and Sais “to the room of truth”

So be it..... Follow me.

To be continued please rate form 1-10 thank you!

same as last time but the length is better, just have more written.

5/10

[nublet]

thank you man. i five form you has gotta be awesome lol uhm any tips for chapter 3?

[bboyz4]

Knights of Cydonia Chapter 2

I am Celion. An average 14 year old boy searching for the meaning of his life.

Celion! Get back up and try again!
That’s my father Siegfried Faullgorauth the leader of unit 43 of the knights of Cydonia. Right now I’m training sword fighting with my brother Sylian soldier 7 of unit 47 of the knights.
Fight!

My father signals the beginning of the fight with a roar!

As Sylian charge after me raising is wooden sword in the air in a crooked format as if he going to swipe diagonally so I raise my sword with both hand to my left tilting the sword in a horizontal line in order to parry his blow! And just as he swipes I scrape my sword past his and turn behind him leaving his back exposed. I raise my sword with both my hand and bring it down on his back with great speed, but then he kicks my leg and i fall to the ground. He quickly jumps back and his ready to charge again, he raises his sword and charges towards me so i slide across the dirt fill pit and raise my sword in a parry and block his slice. In a daring decision i then swipe kick him leaving him on the ground.

As i steadily come to my feet he does the same and we both stare at each other with gruesome anger filled eyes and we both raise our swords and yell as we charge at each other. Now he is about a foot away i stop, slide and lower my sword to his stomach and pound in to his torso. I let loose one more shriek and the punch his face thus punding him to the dirt.

Great Celion you did great! Now you are almost ready to join the knights.

I walk slowly and quietly and let out my hand to my brother in order to help him up, but he smacks my hand away and wobbles to his feet with anger and hatred filled in his eyes.
As he’s limping away I feel guilty but I also feel...great that I finally beat my brother. I walk to my father and I ask him what’s next

You must learn to have the wisdom of a true knight of Cydonia, follow me

While we are walking I realise a really tall castle leading to the skies. Its surface contains a lot of rocky blocks held together by gravity I realize a top window with a young woman in a blue silver lined dress staring at me with tears running down her face. She looks back very quickly as if she heard a noise.
Slam!
I heard a loud noise coming from the east when I look I see a rack of food collapsed on the ground, when I look back to the window I cannot see the girl anymore all I see is the darkness of the room.

See son look that’s where we are going, there a really nice princess who lives here and she likes boys with bravery and remorse in their souls. She would be perfect for you.

I didn’t respond to what he was saying because I was just amazed by the pure elegance and beauty of this tremendous castle.
As we near the castle we see two tall men in black plated armour laced with silver and gold, they both wield two very long golden spears that look as if they were cracked and scraped with several spike hanging out of each side. After a conversation between my dad and them we finally gain entrance to the castle. It look much, much bigger inside than it does outside of the castle out of the dark hallway comes a little man in a red nobleman outfit and greets us.

Hello! Welcome to the kingdom of Cydonia, I am the castle tour just tell me where you would like to go and I will take you!
Before I even get to speak my father comes in and Sais “to the room of truth”

So be it..... Follow me.

To be continued please rate form 1-10 thank you!

same as last time but the length is better, just have more written.

5/10

As the last chapter,I'm impressed with the story I guess.

[jonlin]

ummm....... sorta confusing without the quotation marks @_@

[bboyz4]

I need the quotation marks.Can't read it!

[Zaylo]

your threads will be continually locked until quotation marks are used.