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die ( prt 3 )

Post by CoolKid » Thu Jun 10, 2010 12:34 am

P.S. im making up my own attacks
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I looked at the sword, imagining the cruel things done to my friends. "NO!" I screamed trying to fight the image out of my
head.

CHHKKKK

i turned around and gazed.

CHHKKKK

I hopefully stood up and slammed my arm against the wall of the building.

CHHK- " what was that silo? "

i was stunned. i turned to a window on the building wall and, trembling, walked towards it.
" EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEK!!!!!! " silo broke down the wall with a friend. " why, we have a guest here today
jake. " I looked pleadingly towards the person next to him hoping HE would get what was going on.
i looked back at silo. " How?.....WHEN DID YOU-- " i was cut off because just then... THE SWORD!
i reached for the sword, and knew something was happening. i stood up and shouted

" LIGHTNING CHAIN!!!!! "

sparks of lighting flew down on them. Silo grabbed a sword sitting in the corner. " how'd i miss that!? "
He thrashed my shirt and left not even a scratch on my bare skin.
we took the fight outside and i unleashed my dark side, Beryl.

" HEART OF SHADOWS!!! "

apparantaly silo and jake had been torn up
and were bleeding.
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by EternalSorrow » Fri Jun 11, 2010 4:06 pm

Errr......
It........ er.......
sucks......
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by CoolKid » Sat Jun 12, 2010 1:22 am

oh yeah lets see you try one before commenting ON MINE THAT IT SUCKS
go ahead tuff guy
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by EternalSorrow » Sat Jun 12, 2010 2:43 am

CoolKid wrote:oh yeah lets see you try one before commenting ON MINE THAT IT SUCKS
go ahead tuff guy

I have a fan fiction, go ahead and read it... sigh
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by CoolKid » Sat Jun 12, 2010 7:18 pm

screw that one
make one with fighting ALL THE TIME
*shake *
huh what did i just say?
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by Dracoplasm » Sun Jun 20, 2010 4:29 am

No seriously
It sucks.
Your just 9 remember? -.-
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by EternalSorrow » Mon Jun 21, 2010 1:32 pm

Sorry if I was too harsh...
Dammit I'm getting soft...
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by CoolKid » Tue Jun 29, 2010 4:59 pm

its okay.
EternalSorrow wrote:Sorry if I was too harsh...
Dammit I'm getting soft...
i just dont take critisism very well..
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by EternalSorrow » Sat Jul 03, 2010 10:23 am

CoolKid wrote:its okay.
EternalSorrow wrote:Sorry if I was too harsh...
Dammit I'm getting soft...
i just dont take critisism very well..

Well, if you don't understand it, try just accepting it. Once you do, you can continue down your own path.
Wait - I'm certain Jecht said something like that in Dissidia Final Fantasy....
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by Dracoplasm » Wed Jul 07, 2010 10:35 am

EternalSorrow wrote:
CoolKid wrote:its okay.
EternalSorrow wrote:Sorry if I was too harsh...
Dammit I'm getting soft...
i just dont take critisism very well..

Well, if you don't understand it, try just accepting it. Once you do, you can continue down your own path.
Wait - I'm certain Jecht said something like that in Dissidia Final Fantasy....


FF Reference Ftw.
+1
Get this straight in your mind plox,
YOUR 9
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by skygar9 » Fri Jul 16, 2010 7:06 am

I have a dream that one day people will not be judged by the number of their age, but by the content of their character.
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by LeoWu1 » Mon Jul 19, 2010 8:42 pm

EternalSorrow wrote:Errr......
It........ er.......
sucks......

Dude who do you think you are? You just go to someones fan fiction and tell them they are bad at writing. Sure she has some grammar errors but i believe her story line is better than you in so many ways. You think your better than everyone else you think your superior and your good at writing. I almost laugh when i see your attitude. If your FF was actually good the real writers would say something about it. Oh yea and get some more experience here, Neither Zaylo, nor Jonlin has posted on your FF. Or not that i have known of.
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by CoolKid » Tue Jul 20, 2010 3:22 am

DID YOU JUST CALL ME A HE!!!!
Omfg I am a girl!!!! And wow leowu I thought u were a flamer().()
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by skygar9 » Tue Jul 20, 2010 5:37 am

CoolKid wrote:DID YOU JUST CALL ME A HE!!!!
Omfg I am a girl!!!! And wow leowu I thought u were a flamer().()

Leowu is indeed a flamer. He's flaming eternalsorrow. he also flamed my fanfics, but I made him angry and made more fanfics, so much he couldn't have time to flame 'em all and quit mapleanime.
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by CoolKid » Tue Jul 20, 2010 6:14 pm

LOLL IM GONNA DO THAT NOW!
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by LeoWu1 » Tue Jul 20, 2010 6:34 pm

He He nothing like good Little Females trying so hard to get me mad.
I'll be ready :P
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by jonlin » Fri Aug 13, 2010 5:10 am

lol Leo, at first all my mind saw in that sentence was:

'Girls trying to get hard' magically arrangin themselves sooooo ignore that :)

ANYWAYS

This fanfic...
STORY IS GOOD
GRAMMAR NEEDS WORK
PERIOD
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Re: die ( prt 3 )

Post by Gatorade » Fri Aug 13, 2010 5:19 am

WTF IS THIS SHIET??? (MS2) (MS2) (MS2)
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