die ( part 4 )

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die ( part 4 )

Post by CoolKid » Tue Jul 20, 2010 6:42 pm

WHERE WE LAST SAW LILIAC SHE WAS FIGHTING WITH A FREIND NAMED SILO AND HIS FRIEND JAKE.
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" Not yet... we're not dead yet... BUT SOON YOU WILL BE! " Silo gripped his sword and thrashed my arms.
" ouch " i said softly. i didnt want to show i was beginning to grow weak.
my dark side disapeared and i was fine. I went back to normal attacks.
" WORLD BREAKING!! " a huge crack formed into the earth and threw silo and jake flying through the air.
" DANGIT! JAKE YOUR TURN. " jake's eyes went deep red and he murmered " the shadow of death "


a huge blast of dark light went hurtling for me and i was saved by a very bright light
i looked and saw my four friends carrying me.


i stood back infront of silo and jake and stabbed them both with the sword.
i saw them turn to dust and then disappear. I looked at my " dead " friends and
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" the battle... has been... won " they cheered silently and i still felt guilty.
i slid the sword through my heart and my spirit floated high above my body.
i said with my last breath " wait...for...me...guys..." and i lay there DEAD

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Re: die ( part 4 )

Post by LeoWu1 » Tue Jul 20, 2010 7:27 pm

Too short. Errors are everywhere. Im starting to agree with Eternalsorrow Hes right. You do suck.

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Re: die ( part 4 )

Post by CoolKid » Sat Jul 24, 2010 2:00 am

shut the hell up flamer im a f-ing ten year old and you think THIS is ABNORMAL?
im a f-ing ten year old OF COURSE IM GONNA MAKE SOME MISTAKES

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Re: die ( part 4 )

Post by skygar9 » Sat Jul 24, 2010 11:08 pm

CoolKid wrote:shut the hell up flamer im a f-ing ten year old and you think THIS is ABNORMAL?
im a f-ing ten year old OF COURSE IM GONNA MAKE SOME MISTAKES

Like I said,

ignore the trolls. Trolls look for things they think that 'suck' (Which is an opinion)

But if you ignore them, they eventually go away (That may not be true)

Keep on making more fanfics, coolkid, and let the trolls flame you. But try this, it'll be a good laugh; take all their insults as a compliment! You can outsmart a troll, it's possible. Ooh ooh, do 'Reverse psycoligy' it always works.

Fight FIRE with FIRE in a flame war

Troll: This fanfic is morbidly horrible. Stop writing and go get a life
Coolkid: Thanks for the compliments! Im going to make the next chapter soon!


Lol reverse psycoligy is so epic, it makes opinions fail

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Re: die ( part 4 )

Post by LeoWu3 » Sun Jul 25, 2010 8:53 pm

unfortunately, Im not a troll so Your paragraph was talking about how your friend sucked at writing..

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Re: die ( part 4 )

Post by skygar9 » Mon Jul 26, 2010 4:05 am

LeoWu3 wrote:unfortunately, Im not a troll so Your paragraph was talking about how your friend sucked at writing..

If you were a troll you'd have spiky hair and beady eyes

Trolls scare mee.

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Re: die ( part 4 )

Post by LeoWu3 » Mon Jul 26, 2010 6:51 pm

skygar9 wrote:
LeoWu3 wrote:unfortunately, Im not a troll so Your paragraph was talking about how your friend sucked at writing..

If you were a troll you'd have spiky hair and beady eyes

Trolls scare mee.


umm. Ok. Random. Ty.

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Re: die ( part 4 )

Post by skygar9 » Mon Jul 26, 2010 7:57 pm

COOLKID MAKE A PART 5!!!!!!

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Re: die ( part 4 )

Post by jonlin » Fri Aug 13, 2010 5:17 am

NOTE: I was about 9-10 when I joined this site,
the stories ARE way too short
the Grammar DOES need work
but the story idea ish good :)

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