Once in Henesys,Adam and his friends Gator,Ben and Avothe.
"School sucks" Gator mentioned
"I know" Ben said
"Why don't we go to Ant Tunnel"? I said
"What about school dude"? Avothe said
"Who needs school" Gator said
"Everyone"! Avothe said
As we walked to the cab the guy was like
"Sleepywood,Ha I only take to Ellinia".
We went along with it and ran away when he asked for the money.We walked up to the biggest tree that always grew and jumped off the cliff to Sleepywood.As we walked in Ant Tunnel we went to Gator's house to use his teleporter to get our weapons because we didn't have time to get the stuff.I got my Demon Sickle,Ben's Doughnut,Avothe's Sword and Gator's stuff.Then,we went to Ant Tunnel and we killed some balrogs and a Zombie Mushmom and Gator found a crack in the wall and he touched it.
"Woaaahhhh" Gator said
The crack had opened and we were pulled in to the crack in dimension...
We were in a space time travel thing and we ended up at our high school...in 1985.
"Class of 1985" I read.
"My mom went to school here in 1985"! Gator said
As we walked through the school I say lots of people who I reconized.When we got close to our teacher the vision blurred,the walls cracked people dissapeared and it soon hit me the crack had been shut and we were lost in time in 1985.We were all scared,the crack had been closed we were stuck in Henesys 1985 and the fact that no communcation was available to call 25 years ahead into the future.
"Whatever noob closed the crack is going to die when I get out of here". Ben said furiously
Then,my cell rang I picked up and said "Hello"?
The voice on the other side was crackly and crisp.
"lost in time,I see" said the voice.
I remembered that voice it was the jock kid from Henesys High,Conan.
"What did you do this time Conan"? I said.
"just having some fun messing with time" he said
"open the crack again Conan"! I said
"no why should I you make fun of me your friends have jobs your an Aran,Gator's a Night Lord,Avothe's a Paladin,Ben in a Hermit." he said
"your a cry baby junior head football player soon to be warrior get a hold on yourself you wimp"! I said
"see what I mean,you and your wretched friends will be happy in 1985". he said
"just c'mon man I promise to be nice"? I said sarcastically
"No,I'm sure Kate wouldn't mind a new boyfriend either hmm see you in 25 years". he said
We need to get out of here fast or I will get kicked out of my job and Kate will like Conan I have to hurry.
I ran ahead to find a way to get back to Henesys 2010.
hoped you liked it chapter 2 shoould be coming soom rate 1-10 say what you liked or didn't and ill be sure to fix in chapter 2
~Adam~
Lost in Time Chapter 1
Re: Lost in Time Chapter 1
since indents don't work, double space.
A little more Detail
Grammar/Spelling.
Overall eh, 7/10
A little more Detail
Grammar/Spelling.
Overall eh, 7/10
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Re: Lost in Time Chapter 1
thx Jonlin so you want the next chapter?????
Re: Lost in Time Chapter 1
lol yes I do
Re: Lost in Time Chapter 1
Should
have
some
of
these.
To be honest your grammer sucked.
6/10 overall.
"My mom went to school here in 1985"! Gator said
When it should be: "My mom has gone to school here in 1985!" ,Gator exclaimed
have
some
of
these.
To be honest your grammer sucked.
6/10 overall.
"My mom went to school here in 1985"! Gator said
When it should be: "My mom has gone to school here in 1985!" ,Gator exclaimed
Re: Lost in Time Chapter 1
Gatorade wrote:Should
have
some
of
these.
To be honest your grammer sucked.
6/10 overall.
"My mom went to school here in 1985"! Gator said
When it should be: "My mom has gone to school here in 1985!" ,Gator exclaimed
Let me say a few things...
I already said everything important you said above.
and said is acceptable in that case, it's not a 'it should(must or I'll flame you) be' or all you are is a tyrant
Also, you already made a whole thread around this issue, no need to spam more about it just to increase your f***ing post count -.-
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Re: Lost in Time Chapter 1
thx for the information Jonlin now ima write it tommorow or saturday
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Re: Lost in Time Chapter 1
Gatorade wrote:Should
have
some
of
these.
To be honest your grammer sucked.
6/10 overall.
"My mom went to school here in 1985"! Gator said
When it should be: "My mom has gone to school here in 1985!" ,Gator exclaimed
Dude wth it would be my mom went to school here if we were in 1985 genious ???!!!!!