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G.R.A.V.E Ch 2 Part 2

Post by EmberSparks » Sat Jan 23, 2010 11:05 am

Phew, done with this and chapter 3! And I just noticed I can't make this a Ch 3 so I decided to make a Part 2.
Okay, here I go!

Draco dodged the attack easily, and counterd the attack by sticking the spear into the vampire's back. Shinji groaned and muttered "This....isn't.... it!"

A burst of light erupted from Shinji's body, and his appearance was transformed from a humanlike body to the lean, skeletal body of a demon. Leathery wings appeared on his back, and he sprouted a bony tail.

Hikaru, still sprawled on the floor, hurried to his sword and picked it up. This Draco guy.... is he a vampire too? Why is he killing his own family? How did this Shinji vampire transform! More questions, and no answers...

Slowly, Shinji flapped his wings and tried to escape through the window.

Draco shouted "Dokuganryu! Grant me strength!"

A gust of wind blew, and Hikaru watched as Draco's right eye suddenly turned a pale shade of blue.

"Wh-what the....."

Shinji fell to the floor, unable to move. Hikaru also suddenly felt numbness in his arm. He's.... it's one of the forbidden Skills![/u] he thought.[u] But- Impossible! Empress Cygnus sealed them up years ago.... how could he-

Draco turned to the now paralyzed Shinji, the Pinaka in his hand. "Brother... rest in peace."

SPLAT!

Hikaru nearly screamed when he saw Shinji's head disconnect with his body. Slowly, Shinji's corpse turned to dust, vanishing in the moonlight.

Draco turned to Hikaru. "Now," he said, "I do not know who you are, or why you are here, but I'll have to finish you off."

Hikaru raised his sword, ready to battle.

Before Draco could strike, Hikaru landed a roundhouse kick to his head, followed by a few falcon punches to his stomach. Draco spat blood.

"Ready to give up, Draco?"

Draco wiped the blood away from his mouth, gritting his mouth. "It's not over yet!" he cried, as he leapt out of the window.

The adrenaline that powered Hikaru during the last few seconds started to fade, and Hikaru, overcome with exhaustion, fainted.........

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Re: G.R.A.V.E Ch 2 Part 2

Post by jonlin » Sat Jan 23, 2010 6:54 pm

FYI falcon punch is not a skill -.-

other then that not bad.

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Post by EmberSparks » Sun Jan 24, 2010 6:47 am

jonlin wrote:FYI falcon punch is not a skill -.-

other then that not bad.

It's comic relief.
Actually, in the original copy (in my notebook) the fight is much longer, but in order to make it simpler, I shortened it.
In the original copy:
Draco fainted.
Hikaru tricked Shinji and chucked a spear at him.
In the end, a G.R.A.V.E hero saves them (not gonna tell you who he is)

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Post by Dracoplasm » Sun Jan 24, 2010 9:19 am

lol Ember just write ur Fanfics on notepads it'll be easier and faster

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Post by Zaylo » Sun Jan 24, 2010 2:46 pm

Dracoplasm wrote:lol Ember just write ur Fanfics on notepads it'll be easier and faster

On word you mean.

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Post by jonlin » Sun Jan 24, 2010 11:21 pm

yes he probably meant that, and I will enforce the fact that you should use word/ w/e, at least something with spellcheck.

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Post by EmberSparks » Tue Jan 26, 2010 2:09 am

I write it down on pieces of paper -.-

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Post by Dracoplasm » Tue Jan 26, 2010 6:25 am

lol write it down on the computer wordpad you'll get ur Fanfics done faster that way

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Post by playa4life01 » Wed Jan 27, 2010 7:24 pm

Dracoplasm wrote:lol write it down on the computer wordpad you'll get ur Fanfics done faster that way


pieces of paper is easier i think
when ur bored at school, he can think of the rest of the story??? or sumthing liek that

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Post by chobbilight » Wed Jan 27, 2010 10:28 pm

your fanfic is still missing something (F3)
but still good

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Post by Zaylo » Thu Jan 28, 2010 3:12 am

Dracoplasm wrote:lol write it down on the computer wordpad you'll get ur Fanfics done faster that way

your stupid, if anyone writes on wordpad, and not Microsoft word it proves why should shouldn't be writing.

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Post by EmberSparks » Fri Jan 29, 2010 4:57 am

chobbilight wrote:your fanfic is still missing something (F3)
but still good

yeah I forgot a certain cookie lover... (F3)

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Post by chobbilight » Fri Jan 29, 2010 4:45 pm

EmberSparks wrote:
chobbilight wrote:your fanfic is still missing something (F3)
but still good

yeah I forgot a certain cookie lover... (F3)

...exactly (F3)

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Re: G.R.A.V.E Ch 2 Part 2

Post by EmberSparks » Sat Jan 30, 2010 11:48 am

chobbilight wrote:
EmberSparks wrote:
chobbilight wrote:your fanfic is still missing something (F3)
but still good

yeah I forgot a certain cookie lover... (F3)

...exactly (F3)

You'll be out soon.
Since you want to kill MsMeowzers so much.... (oops spoiler)

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Post by MsMeowzers » Sat Jan 30, 2010 4:36 pm

EmberSparks wrote:You'll be out soon.
Since you want to kill MsMeowzers so much.... (oops spoiler)

SSAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYYY WWWWWWWWWWWWHHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAATTTTTTTTT?!

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Re: G.R.A.V.E Ch 2 Part 2

Post by pvtsharp » Sat Jan 30, 2010 4:48 pm

What about meh? dont forget meh (eek)

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Post by chobbilight » Sat Jan 30, 2010 5:20 pm

MsMeowzers wrote:
EmberSparks wrote:You'll be out soon.
Since you want to kill MsMeowzers so much.... (oops spoiler)

SSAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYYY WWWWWWWWWWWWHHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAATTTTTTTTT?!

........no....its the other way around

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Re: G.R.A.V.E Ch 2 Part 2

Post by pvtsharp » Tue Feb 02, 2010 2:29 am

i dunno why when i read this FF i think of this..... (MS1)

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Re: G.R.A.V.E Ch 2 Part 2

Post by EmberSparks » Sun Feb 07, 2010 6:13 am

pvtsharp wrote:i dunno why when i read this FF i think of this..... (MS1)

Think of WHAT?
MsMeowzers wrote:
EmberSparks wrote:You'll be out soon.
Since you want to kill MsMeowzers so much.... (oops spoiler)

SSAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYYY WWWWWWWWWWWWHHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAATTTTTTTTT?!

Whoops, sorry..... *begs for forgiveness*
BITE MEH

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Post by MsMeowzers » Sun Feb 07, 2010 3:43 pm

EmberSparks wrote:
MsMeowzers wrote:
EmberSparks wrote:You'll be out soon.
Since you want to kill MsMeowzers so much.... (oops spoiler)

SSAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYYY WWWWWWWWWWWWHHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAATTTTTTTTT?!

Whoops, sorry..... *begs for forgiveness*
BITE MEH

NO.
HOW MANY TIMES MUST I TELL YOU NO?
I've now got Flandre for that.*Sends her over*

Whenever I read this it reminds me of this:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w9JMbel2CKs

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