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Rivalry...
is that suppose to be a complement?
and i'm sorry chobi..
And yea you can be in my next fan fiction.
Good or evil?
poor or rich?
tell me waht you want and need.
BY the way synn
Like i'm not being mean or
i'm not tryign to diss you at all
but i dont really like your stye either..
Like seriously
I'm not insulting or anything at all.
Honest...
When i write something it would be like this.
He opened his eyes as the bright rays of
the sun shined into his brown eyes,
he lowered his head a bit as then
adjusted his eyes up. The face
of his mother came upon his
eyes. Her blue eyes stared right
into his with such warmness
as the colour of her blond hair.
She screamed as everything
went black.
When you would right it like this
I opened my eyes as the bright
rays of the sun shined into my
brown eyes, I lowered my head
a bit, then adjusted my eyes upward.
my mothers face came upon my
sight. He blue eyes looked at me
with such warmness like the
colour of her blond hair.
I heard the pitch scream of
my mother and everything went
black.
That would how you would write it.
We have not only that style but we have differant ways
of writing. My own writing style is
much differant than yours. It gives continuious
actions of the character and more discription of the back
ground with barely any analizing. Thats why i use "as" alot
if you have ever read my storys. Thats my own signature
way of writing.
When yours would be Short parts of actions and
giving what the character see and feel.
Sight.
little discription yet lots of analizing.
We are differnant is many ways but
yet unique in our own writing style.
But what i do like about your style is that
there are many ways of writing things
that i cant write in my style like.
Example:
I laied there.
Motionless.
under that one tree.
as thoughts kept
coming and going
throughout my head.
I gripped my fist and slammed it
on the grass.
"DAM YOU JOHN"
I shouted.
as I knew in my way In my road,
In the story of my life that there
is a corner deep in everyone's heart.
a little corner saved only for a very special
person. And to me John, you were that person...
You gave me happiness,happiness that could
never be granted and yet i feel it just by thinking
of you. You brought me wonder, You brought me light,
and yet Many pages of my life has been written on yours.
and yet your gone now...
Tears came down my cheeks.
John, You make me think, You make me wonder,
so hard, Why my corner, in my heart.
Was saved...
just for you.
now that is something I cant write in my style of writing
and I really like to write like that but somehow I cant...
well i could but it wouldnt be as good or sound as good
or be as good to read. so yea. :)
Anyways i hope you understand what I mean.
Thanks for you time
i know it was a long post.
Hope you improve in writing.