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Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 1:56 am
by poke1024
Well, since i abandoned my animation project, i might as well write a fan fic on it.


it couldnt indent so forgive me on that...

Well here it is.....



Deep in the forest, Poe was chopping up some wood for the fireplace in his house. He wiped the soot off his face and stood there with the pile of wood. His sword was on the ground in the soft blades of grass. He looks at his pile of wood and says, “All in a days work.” He puts his sword back in its sheath, picks up the pile of wood, and walks toward his village.
As he nears his village after a long walk, he sees flames rising from where the village stood. In concern, he drops the pile of wood and rushes toward home, picking his way through the fiery mess. His heart pounded; thump, thump, thump. As he nears his home, he saw that it was too late. His house was in flames and his father lay in the front, nearly burned to death. Poe saw a ring of soldiers around his father’s body and saw one of them finish his father off. Poe rushed toward them shouting, “NOOOOOOOO!”

Poe woke up with a start. He sat up panting, wiping sweat from his brows. “Just a dream,” he thought. He got up, showered and went down for breakfast. “Good morning father,” he said. “Mornin’ son,” said his father. Poe’s father scooped some scrambled eggs onto his plate and Poe happily ate it.

“I am going to go chop some wood okay dad?”

“Sure, go ahead.”

Poe grabbed his sword and went deep into the forest for wood. He chopped wood until late afternoon, after fooling around a bit with his sword, and started to head home.

As he nears his village after a long walk, he sees flames rising from where the village stood. In concern, he drops the pile of wood and rushes toward home, picking his way through the fiery mess. His heart pounded; thump, thump, thump. As he nears his home, he saw that it was too late. His house was in flames and his father lay in the front, nearly burned to death. Poe saw a ring of soldiers around his father’s body and saw one of them finish his father off. Poe stood back in shock. “This can’t be happening,” he thought, “this is just like how my dream had happened.” The soldiers walked off not noticing him, leaving him to deal with his sadness. Poe walked over to his father’s dead body with tears streaming down his face. “Father,” his voice choked with tears, “I will avenge you!” He picked up his father’s body and headed toward the forest, leaving the flames to die out on their own.

When he got deep enough in the forest, he buried his father and marked the place. He started to wander around in the forest for the soldiers, his sword dragging behind him. Night soon came, and he collapsed on the ground with exhaustion. As he lay there, a hooded figure came into view, and quietly, picked Poe up and carried him into the night….


To be continued……

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 2:55 am
by stng75
And the hooded figure was Areus *me*!!!!!

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 2:59 am
by poke1024
actually, the hooded figure is an old mage, (sort of like Grendel the Very Old), but u are not supposed to know that until the next chapter

do you think it is good?> (F6)

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 3:03 am
by stng75
Yeah it was good but in my perspective the dream into reality effect was to fast and hardly any talk scenes
Overall 7/10

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 3:32 am
by jonlin
LOL @ spoiler with no warning

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 3:37 am
by stng75
I forced it out of him LOL

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 3:42 am
by poke1024
well, its okay
im going to write the next chapter soon anyways

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 3:45 am
by stng75
I'm gonna write mine soon to
Omg I have to make two fan fics (F7)

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 3:49 am
by poke1024
why do u have to make 2 fan fics?

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 4:11 am
by stng75
Well the one I made yesterday wasn't the one I talked about in chat

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 2:23 pm
by poke1024
oh, well good luck with that

CH.2 is coming soon

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 4:48 pm
by chobbilight
.....why are almost the story whit "when he walked back his village was on fire"...synn fanfic goes like that and jona's story or was it stng's story

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 5:03 pm
by Zaylo
Well it is a bit cliche...

honestly the whole, Emo-sasuke i must avenge my family thing gets old FAST.
But you have me on the fact you didnt have many errors.

Hope to see more

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 6:49 pm
by chobbilight
Zaylo wrote:Well it is a bit cliche...

honestly the whole, Emo-sasuke i must avenge my family thing gets old FAST.
But you have me on the fact you didnt have many errors.

Hope to see more

let sasuke out of this conv hes cool
and ...yeah its cliche

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 7:59 pm
by Zaylo
chobbilight wrote:
Zaylo wrote:Well it is a bit cliche...

honestly the whole, Emo-sasuke i must avenge my family thing gets old FAST.
But you have me on the fact you didnt have many errors.

Hope to see more

let sasuke out of this conv hes cool
and ...yeah its cliche

hes a 12 year old with black hair blood red eyes and an obsession with killing his brother...

btw Naruto fails

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 8:15 pm
by chobbilight
Zaylo wrote:
chobbilight wrote:
Zaylo wrote:Well it is a bit cliche...

honestly the whole, Emo-sasuke i must avenge my family thing gets old FAST.
But you have me on the fact you didnt have many errors.

Hope to see more

let sasuke out of this conv hes cool
and ...yeah its cliche

hes a 12 year old with black hair blood red eyes and an obsession with killing his brother...

btw Naruto fails

lolz....he changed hes now like 16 or 15...idk naruto shuppenden FTW and nice avy zaylo

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 11:04 pm
by poke1024
well, ch.2 is going to be written today

this is only the first chap, and i promise later chaps wont be too cliche

wow, zaylo actually gave me the best compliment he has ever given me

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 6:22 am
by stng75
chobbilight wrote:.....why are almost the story whit "when he walked back his village was on fire"...synn fanfic goes like that and jona's story or was it stng's story



I said nothing about fires in mine

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 2:22 pm
by chobbilight
i said stng or jona(post 2 short)

Re: Questers: Sanct of Light Ch1

Posted: Thu Jun 04, 2009 2:06 pm
by poke1024
it was in jona fan fic