"Get him!" said Ceres watching a blue streak fly from tree to tree.

"Hah they'll never get back the jewel of rah as long as i say so!" said Jack while zipping through the trees.

Next thing he knows he is faling into a giant rip in the dimension were he is caught by something. He looks up and sees a chronos trying to rip away his soul. All the sudden the jewel lights up and floats and goes into his heart. Next thing he knows he is back out side with the fog of the dead chronos sitting in one of the trees.

"What happened?" cried Jack.

Out of the bushes leaps a monkey with a scar across her face. He walked over to Jack who was trembling on the branch.

"The jewel you have let me see it" said the monkey. All the sudden the monkey started to grow into a beast and started to tell Jack what had happened.

"This is the jewel of raw the thief taker originating in kerning city. He often stole from the Dark Lord who finally kicked him out of the house one day on the way to ellina he found a jewel that changed half of his body into a beast. He then decided to get it refined and was able to find another chunk but it was way lighter. He took this to a very strong refiner who refined it but was affected by the jewel and was turned into a monster ripping a souls out of all living beings. The thief taker had to defeat the man only then getting back the marble. He cursed the jewel only letting blood relatives be able to use its power. He then got a wive in ellina who he transformed to a monkey and burried the jewel so no one could use it. Later somebody escavated it and you stole it. You must be a blood relative. Your probably wondering why i can use it. I am his wife. I was Blessed by a priest who i then turned on and ripped out his soul and enter it into mine so i could live forever. I have heard that the cure to my problem and the power to control the jewel lie in the deepest parts of the Ludibrium Toy factory gaurded by the dreaded Papaltus" Explained the Beast Monkey who's name was Hridy.

"Then what are you waiting for"cried Jack who took the stone from Hridy and started to run.

"Theres one more thing im wanted in Victoria Island, untill we get in the boat were not safe" said Hridy

"Jacks the name, stealths the game im right ahead of you Hryidy" Said Jack running into a hidden portal in one of the trees.

"Oh brother this is gonna be one heck of a trip" moaned Hryidy moving skilfully running through the portal Jack had entered.






Hope you liked it! Its sorta random but thats the only thing i could think of. Rate and Comment! By the way this is my first so enjoy !!

(sniffs air) FANFIC!!!

-reads-

Well I have to say it was pretty good:D
However it could be better
You see the story felt rushed like u thrusted the reader in rather than welcomeing them into the story.
But you have very good grammar!
Another One To look forward to

If u need any help or have amy questions bout fanfics or related just pm me or email me at hanewane@hotmail.com

Thanks so much that message was very inspiring!! Thanks!!

llol
a new fanfic >.>
what zaylo said and same with ur spelling what he sed bout grammer

Jonlin wrote:
llol
a new fanfic >.>
what zaylo said and same with ur spelling what he sed bout grammer

lol thanks i think i didnt really understand wat you were saying -.-"

Jonlin wrote:
llol
a new fanfic >.>
what zaylo said and same with ur spelling what he sed bout grammer

i find it funny how you contradicted your self.

Zaylo wrote:
Jonlin wrote:
llol
a new fanfic >.>
what zaylo said and same with ur spelling what he sed bout grammer

i find it funny how you contradicted your self.

Um me or him?

i wunna be in it

playa4life01 wrote:
i wunna be in it
dont spam

ok

playa4life01 wrote:
ok
good

good

playa4life01 wrote:
good
ok

great

playa4life01 wrote:
great
stop spamming:angry:

sry

playa4life01 wrote:
sryits ok

lolz i want to have the last word

playa4life01 wrote:
lolz i want to have the last word
shut up >__<

OMG stop copying each other!!! its so stupid

but its fun :P you should try it with teachers you know they hate it iff they dont have the last word and they throw you out that lesson iff you dont 'shetep'

What does that have to do with anything???